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Creating Unified Paragraphs
In this module, students will learn to create unified paragraphs having strong topic sentences and supporting details that clearly relate to and develop the topic sentence. Students will also learn to revise their work to improve paragraph unity.
What is a paragraph?
Many beginning writers are not exactly sure what a paragraph should look like. They are unsure how long a paragraph should be, when one paragraph should end and the next one begin, and what logic controls the clustering of sentences together in a paragraph.
In brief, a paragraph is the communication of a single assertion or thought, with enough detail or explanation to make that thought clear to a reader. A new paragraph begins when one thought is fully developed, and a new thought begins. Rules govern the organization and development of paragraphs and provide useful checkpoints for revision:
Unity: All sentences in a paragraph must be unified around a central point or controlling idea. This controlling idea is usually declared in a topic sentence. Supporting sentences contribute information to help the reader see the validity of the controlling idea.
Coherence: Sentences in a paragraph should progress logically to develop the controlling idea. Transitional expressions and patterns of development, such as comparison and contrast, help create coherence. Coherence must also be created between paragraphs to help the reader make the transition from one paragraph to the next. For further instruction on paragraph coherence, you may wish to complete the Paragraph Coherence Module.
Completeness: (or development) Enough specific supporting detail should be provided in the paragraph to make the controlling idea convincing. Writers should select the type of details—description, narration, comparison and contrast, cause and effect, etc.—that best illustrates the controlling idea. For further instruction on paragraph development, you may wish to complete the Paragraph Development Module.
Paragraph unity is perhaps the most important principle for good paragraphs. A reader quickly loses direction and ends up frustrated when confronted with paragraphs having multiple aims. A unified paragraph leaves a reader feeling secure that the writer is in control of her argument and able to lead the reader toward a clear and satisfying conclusion.
Revising for unity: the controlling idea
A good controlling idea is key to a strong paragraph, and the key to a good controlling idea is the author's sense of purpose. All too often developing writers start drafting their essays without a clear sense of what their paragraphs are there for—what each paragraph is supposed to be about and how it will support the thesis.
A good way to develop strong controlling ideas in your paragraphs is to think about the language of your thesis (don't start writing paragraphs until you have at least a provisional thesis). Think about what your reader will need once the thesis is declared. Let's try out this process with an example: Given the following thesis statement (in bold), what questions might the reader have for the writer? What would the reader expect the writer to cover in the essay? Write your thoughts in the text box below then compare your response to ours.
see our response
The author of this passage, Laurence Bregreen, answers all of the questions that his thesis sets up in the paragraphs that follow the thesis: He writes about how Magellan "suddenly found direction" and left Portugal for Spain, then shows that Spain, under Charles I, was much more receptive to Magellan's request for sponsorship than the king of Portugal.
Think of your own thesis as a contract wth your reader, and the language of your thesis as language that shapes everything in the essay. When you are not sure what you want to argue in an essay, be ready to say that you do not as yet know your own mind, and spend some more time brainstorming until you do have that sense of purpose, and language to work with in your essay.
Controlling ideas in paragraphs:
Each paragraph should have its own controlling idea: a topic being discussed + what you want to say about that topic. The controlling idea may be declared in a topic sentence at the beginning, middle, or end of the paragraph, or simply implied through the logic and context of the argument. A topic alone is not enough! If you do not get to the point where you know what you want to say about the topic before you write the paragraph, your paragraph will likely have a unity problem. Take a look at the following topics, and then look at the controlling ideas based on those topics:
Bergreen, Laurence. Over the Edge of the World: Magellan's Terrifying Circumnavigation of the Globe. New York: Perennial, 2003.
Revising for unity: supporting sentences
Writers, once they decide on the controlling idea, have many choices for paragraph development, but these choices are not unlimited. Anything that does not support the controlling idea does not belong in the paragraph. Save it for later, for placement in another paragraph, or another essay if need be, but don't put it in a paragraph that is going in a different direction.
Consider the following poorly unified paragraph:
The paragraph starts out pretty well. The controlling idea appears in the first sentence, and the sentences that follow develop the controlling idea in greater detail until the sentence that begins "Last week, I went to see the sci-fi/horror film Alien. . . " This sentence begins a discussion of degrees of fear that teens feel at horror films, not why horror films are most popular with teens, which is the controlling idea of the paragraph. Given this controlling idea, the author is limited to a discussion of why horror films would be more interesting to teens than to others. To make the paragraph unified, the author would need to rewrite this sentence so that it more directly supports the main idea or remove the sentence altogether.
A good paragraph has oneness of aim in all of its parts. Take a look at the following revision of the above paragraph:
In the revised paragraph, the information that departs from the main idea is removed, and the sentence about why horror films are not popular with children is moved near the beginning of the paragraph alongside the sentence about why horror films are not popular with adults. This move frees the writer to spend the rest of the paragraph emphasizing why horror films appeal to teens. Note also that the clause "I think" is removed. This phrase is not necessary to the paragraph since readers already knows that they are hearing the author's opinion. Phrases like "I think" and "In my opinion" actually detract from the authority of an argument because the shift attention away from the argument the author is making and onto the author's own thinking and writing process.
Unity in descriptive and narrative paragraphs
Creating unity in descriptive and narrative paragraphs can be difficult. In narrative paragraphs, or paragraphs in which a writer tells the story of events, it is easy to fall into the sequence trap, wherein the writer focuses on a "this, then this" structure without any real point or purpose other than moving through events. In a literature analysis essay, for example, it is easy to slip into plot summary, recounting the "this, then this" of the story being analyzed, instead of focusing on how aspects of the story support an interpretation. In descriptive paragraphs, the problem is similar: a writer may get caught up in describing aspects of something without having a sense of purpose. Take a look at an example of a narrative and a descriptive paragraph that need work for unity:
a narrative paragraph that needs work for unity:
This paragraph lacks a controlling idea. The writer narrates his entry into his aunt and uncle's home, and describes what he observes there, but it is difficult to tell what we are to make of these observations. What should the reader pay attention to? What is important here? It is the writer's job to create clear direction.
a descriptive paragraph that needs work for unity (the controlling idea is underlined):
In the table below, each supporting sentence is analyzed in detail for how it does (or does not) support the controlling idea of the paragraph.
Now, take a look at a few strong, unified narrative and descriptive paragraphs.
a unified narrative paragraph:
a unified descriptive paragraph:
1. What is a paragraph?
3. Revising for unity: the controlling idea
4. Revising for unity: supporting sentences
5. Unity in descriptive and narrative paragraphs